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PostSubject: Ali's Script (first draft)   Sun May 29, 2011 10:44 pm

Perriot: The kitchen? Could I assume that you’re getting hungry during this little adventure? It’s perfectly fine. We have a variety of things for you to choose to feast upon.

???: Nnggh…
You hear a sound from the dining car as you enter. You’re not sure what it was, but it sounded like a person. You creep forward keeping an eye out for what it might be, and walking into the kitchen you see someone.

???: ….Why do I even keep trying?

The person you see is sitting at the counter, a half full bottle of alcohol beside another empty one. You try to remain silent so not to interrupt or startle him, not entirely sure what he might do. Out of nervousness, a lump grows in your throat, and as you try and clear it, you make more sound than you hoped and startled the poor guy. Perriot puts a hand on your shoulder.

Perriot: Don’t worry about him. He’s something of an actor in our circus.

???: --What..? (startled, tears rolling down his face as he comes into view).
He clears his throat.

Perriot: This is our daredevil, Nekros.
Ali: O-or informally… Ali… and you are…? Oh… you’re a journalist…? (Solemn features). I don’t see why you would want to come here…
Perriot: Now don’t be rude to our fine guest, Nekros.
You glance at Perriot before looking back at Ali a bit curiously. Something seemed weird…

Player: (1) Why do you say that?
(2) I think you’ve drank too much….
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IF 2:
Ali: (flushed with light anger) N-no I didn’t! I can stand just fine and I-I… I am fine….

Perriot: Drinking has seemed to become a past time of his, but considering he knows how to behave himself, who am I to stop him? (chuckles).

Player: What’s with the drinking?
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BOTH ANSWERS LEAD TO:
Ali: (saddens)...I wouldn’t be here if I didn’t have to… I don’t know why someone like you would choose to be here… You’re lucky you get to leave this nightmare at the end of the ride.
The stranger chuckled lightly to himself. It looked as though he was trying to keep himself from crying… You look at him quietly for a moment, not entirely sure what you should say next. He was obviously short of the same words.

Player: (1) Aren’t you being a little over dramatic?
(2) Why don’t you just leave?
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IF 1:
Ali: …(chuckles sadly)Maybe I am… I’m pretty pathetic, huh..?
Perriot: (Yes, you are.)

Player: (1) You can say that again…
(2) Oh no—I didn’t mean it like that!

IF 1:
Ali: ….I know I—
IF 2:
Ali: …It’s okay…. I think it too…
The performer looked apologetic, but what was he apologizing to you for?
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IF (2) [Why don’t you just leave]
Ali: It’s not that easy…. You can’t just leave once you’ve joined this circus…

Perriot: As he said. It’s a contract, it’s a commitment and obviously you cannot leave something as binding as that.
Player: (1) Really? Is that all?
(2) What do you mean?
IF 1:
You see Perriot give Ali a sort of look, you’re not entirely sure what it means, but then you see Ali shrink back a little as Perriot looks back at you with that ever welcoming smile on his face.

Ali: (flustered) Y-yes… that’s all…
Perriot: You see, he has a few problems with commitments is all.
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BOTH LEAD TO THIS.
Ali goes quiet as you see him pick the drink up from the counter and take a swig. You open your mouth to speak, but Perriot seems all too enthusiastic about filling the dead air before any more questions can be asked.
Perriot: It’s all a personal matter—and as I said before, it’s also preshow setup. You can imagine how difficult it would be to escape death every day, but he’s always such a good sport about it.
As Perriot continues to smile, Ali’s face turns red as he looks away, you’re not sure what the meaning is behind all of this, but you are sure to write it down in your notebook to review later,

Perriot: Why don’t I show you another room while he prepares for the show?
Ali: What? N-no… you don’t need to apologize… I’m sorry I interrupted….(He smiles lightly, blushing) It was nice meeting you.
Perriot: Yes, very nice indeed. However, (name), we have quite a few things to cover and I’d like to make sure you learn about every corner of the circus before you leave. That being said, where would you like to go next?


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Let me know about any errors or things that are potentially not gonna work and such.
Or If I slaughtered Perry OTZ
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PostSubject: Re: Ali's Script (first draft)   Mon May 30, 2011 3:35 am

Here's what I came up with using your script.
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After choosing "Cookhouse"
Pierrot: The cookhouse, huh?
Are you hungry, [Name]? How cute.
No need to be embarrassed, ahaha!
Come, follow me. I'll make sure you get something good.


You follow Pierrot into a large tent. Lunch benches were set up, but they were all empty.
The place was lit by a few dim lamps hanging from scattered poles throughout the tent.
It was eerily silent compared to the cacophany outside.

Pierrot: Empty is a good sign. That means no one's slacking here.

Pierrot gestures at an empty bench.

Pierrot: Take a seat, [Name]. I'll just check if there's anything in the kitchen.

You sit on the bench and watch him walk across the tent to the other exit where the kitchen was.
As he was halfway across, Pierrot suddenly trips and falls down.

Pierrot: FUCK--!!

You walk to where he lay face down on the ground.

Pierrot: S-son of a...

As he stands up, you see an arm sticking out from under the bench next to where he fell.

???: Nnggh...

A man suddenly crawls out of the bench, his fingers curled around a bottle. You spot a small collection of empty bottles below the table he came from.
He seems oblivious to you two as he straightens up, using the bench table for support and sets the bottle in his hand down on the table.

???: Why do I even keep trying...?

Pierrot: -annoyed- Ugh, why indeed?
(sigh) How embarrassing...
I was hoping to spare you from a sight like this, [Name].


The man looks at the two of you, startled.

Pierrot: Good morning, slacker.

???: P-Perry...

The man's eyes land on you questioningly.

Pierrot: [Name], this fool is Ali.
You might know him better as Nekros, our daredevil.


Ali: Who...who are you?
Oh, you're a journalist...
I don’t see why you would want to come here...


Pierrot: Don't be rude to our guest, idiot.

You look at Pierrot, and then at Ali.
Something seems off…

Choices:
(1) Why do you say that?:

Ali: I wouldn't be here if I didn't have to...
Ali: I don’t know why someone like you would come here.
Ali: You’re lucky you get to leave this nightmare at the end of the ride.

Ali chuckles lightly to himself, as though he was trying to keep himself from crying.
Pierrot: Oh please, you're so dramatic.
Don't pay any attention to him, [Name]. He's always like this.
It's a pain, but you get used to it eventually.
-smile- Just ignore how depressing he is.


(2)I think you’ve drank too much...:
Ali: N-no I haven't!
I can stand just fine and I-I...I'm fine...

Pierrot: Drinking has recently become a past time of his, [Name].
-smile- But as long as he knows how to behave himself, who am I to stop him?
-thoughtful- Drinking before the show? Well, it could be a problem...
-smile- But I think it's better if he's drunk during his stunts anyway.
Aren't drunks so depressing?


Ali looks apologetically at you.

Ali: I know what you're thinking.
I'm pretty pathetic, aren't I?


Pierrot: You don't need to ask me twice to agree.

Ali: I'm sorry...

Pierrot: He's also very suicidal. Would you like a demonstration, [Name]?

Ali: I...I don't think that's a good idea...

Pierrot: No need to worry about him, he's built strong.

Ali: Do you see how hard it is to get along with the people here, [Name]?
Hmm? Why don't I just leave?
I...I wish it was that easy...


Pierrot: You can't leave once you've joined.
By joining with your free will, you've agreed to a lifetime contract, and you just can't break something as binding as that.
Right, Ali?


Pierrot shoots a quick look at Ali, making him shrink back.

Ali: Y-yes, that's right.

Ali avoids your gaze as he grabs the bottle he set on the table and takes a swig.

Pierrot: -smile- It's just the way it is.
Wow, look at how far off-topic we've come.
If you're done being pathetic, Ali, then get back to work.
And clean up that mess you left under the bench. It'll be a problem if someone steps on them at supper tonight.


Pierrot turns to you as Ali bends down to pick up the bottles.

Pierrot: -smile- Well, [Name], that was one hell of a detour, but shall we continue?
Huh? You're not hungry anymore?
(sigh) You'll make me feel guilty if you lost your appetite because of Ali, [Name].


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Add or change whatever you like. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Ali's Script (first draft)   Mon May 30, 2011 10:18 am

ahaha XDD I knew I watered Perry down.
OTZ.
I'll think about it and see if there is anything I'd like to add.

Thanks Jonah. :'D
It's so magical now.
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PostSubject: Re: Ali's Script (first draft)   Mon May 30, 2011 7:50 pm

I'm glad you like it. C:

Just let me know then~
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